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Japanese Death Poems(secretorum.life)
68 points by NaOH 3 days ago | 21 comments
pjc50 4 hours ago | parent | next [-]

I only know a tiny corner of the language, but for things like this I really wish they'd cite the original Japanese. Precisely because the haiku is a constrained form, it is also an opportunity for ambiguity, double-meaning, and cases where a word may be translated with the same semantics but different connotations.

By comparison, the gold standard for dealing with non-English poetry in English: https://www.perseus.tufts.edu/hopper/text?doc=Perseus:text:1...

You have (1) the original Greek, (2) word-by-word lookup, (3) translation notes, and (4) multiple translations.

buntsai 3 hours ago | parent | next [-]

Agree 10,000 fold. English and Japanese are so different and have such different standards of aesthetics and literary form that good translations are like independent creations inspired by the original. I would like to know that the original form was. Even a word by word ungrammatical transliteration would be helpful. But not to have the Japanese available means I cannot even look it up...

tl2do 2 hours ago | parent | prev [-]

I am a native Japanese

Original Kanji - hiragana works: おほけなき床の錦や散り紅葉

How it sounds: Oh ke naki Yukano nishikiya chiri ko yo

darkerside 36 minutes ago | parent [-]

Oh ho ke na ki?

tl2do 2 hours ago | parent | prev | next [-]

As a native Japanese speaker, I'm happy to see our literature introduced to other countries. But I also feel conflicted.

The original Japanese of the first poem is:

おほけなき床の錦や散り紅葉

The translation on the site:

> I am not worthy > of this crimson carpet: > autumn maple leaves.

This contains the translator's interpretation, and the sound and intonation are completely lost. I admire the translator's effort, but I want visitors to understand how much this differs from the original.

darkerside 34 minutes ago | parent [-]

I feel like trying to replicate the meter in English is a silly constraint

I would prefer to know how each line would be best interpreted if it weren't a haiku

stared 13 minutes ago | parent | prev | next [-]

In the topic of death poems, I consider "You Want It Darker" by Leonard Cohen a masterpiece. He was 83 with terminal cancer. Yet, this song captures both his wit & spirit at its height.

seletskiy 5 hours ago | parent | prev | next [-]

  Now that my storehouse
  has burned down, nothing
  conceals the moon.
This piece instantly reminded me of Ashes and Snow movie, where one of the poems has very similar opening (followed, in my opinion, by even more beautiful piece, which you can easily find if interested):

  Ever since my house burnt down,
  I see the moon more clearly
I wonder whether or not this is just a coincidence.
aanet 5 hours ago | parent [-]

I was reminded of the writer Pico Iyer's beautiful writing in Aflame: Learning from Silence of exactly this sentiment, after his house burned down [1]

`My house burnt down

I can now see better

The rising moon`

[1] https://www.mariashriversundaypaper.com/pico-iyers-fire-grie...

andyjohnson0 an hour ago | parent | prev | next [-]

    Don’t just stand there with your hair turning gray,
    soon enough the seas will sink your little island.
    So while there is still the illusion of time,
    set out for another shore.
    No sense packing a bag.
    You won’t be able to lift it into your boat.
    Give away all your collections.
    Take only new seeds and an old stick.
    Send out some prayers on the wind before you sail.
    Don’t be afraid.
    Someone knows you’re coming.
    An extra fish has been salted.
by Mona (Sono) Santacroce (1928–1995)

from The Five Invitations: Discovering What Death Can Teach Us About Living Fully by Frank Ostaseski

DaedalusII 3 hours ago | parent | prev | next [-]

The sun sips the sky until it is drowning

I am circling my prey

If I am strong, the world will finally let us be

https://pearlharbor.org/wp-content/uploads/2023/03/USS-Essex...

pndy 4 hours ago | parent | prev | next [-]

This is surely epitaph equivalent from that part of the world

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Epitaph?useskin=vector

Noaidi 3 hours ago | parent | prev | next [-]

Since time began

the dead alone know peace.

Life is but melting snow.

~~

Having a mental illness and being homeless I sit with my life now and let it melt. I know death is coming so I just let it come. I tried to force death to come twice, but I found that suffering is really no different that joy.

I live in a van right now so I am upper class homeless but soon I may be totally shelterless. Part of me is looking forward to it. Through the last ten years, moving from riches to rags, all my past attachments, all I can do is laugh at myself. There is such a weird liberation in inescapable suffering and I hope you all get to experience it someday.

block_dagger 5 hours ago | parent | prev | next [-]

Death is apparently snowy

lukan 5 hours ago | parent | next [-]

I don't know whether there is a specific japanese cultural explanation, but in general it often was. In winter when it was cold, those who lacked the strength to go on, layed down in the snow to rest forever.

gcanyon 35 minutes ago | parent [-]

I don't remember who said it, but a statement that has stuck with me is:

The moment when the most you can do is less than the least you need to do, you die.

DaedalusII 3 hours ago | parent | prev [-]

spirits travel to rest in the mountains after death. the mountain is a place between life and death. there is much association between mountains and death. then by extension snow

pelasaco 5 hours ago | parent | prev | next [-]

"A last fart: are these the leaves of my dream, vainly falling?

In the original, the image of a dream is combined with the cruder image of passing wind.."

Is the wind representing the fart here?

pjc50 4 hours ago | parent | next [-]

"Passing wind" is an English euphemism, the original does not use "kaze" (wind) but goes straight for "he" (fart).

The original word order also puts the dream at the start and drops fart right at the end, which I think is funnier than putting it on the first line.

shawn_w 4 hours ago | parent | prev [-]

Passing wind is another term (among many others) for farting.

ThrowawayTestr an hour ago | parent | prev [-]

"Death poems

are mere delusion—

death is death."

Hardcore