| ▲ | lucastamoios 4 hours ago | |
I use to read a lot, big novels and short stories, and I know when I see something that is good. Yours is. One thing that I give you as feedback, maybe for another version, or for future stories, would be to develop a bit more on why keep the friendship with Aaron. I know it was there some reasons, but for me it was a bit harder to follow. But even this is a small thing. Tell us if you have something else written to share. | ||
| ▲ | sarreph 4 hours ago | parent [-] | |
> develop a bit more on why keep the friendship with Aaron. Thanks for your feedback (I got similar feedback from my friend and my partner who both write). I agree that this felt like a bit of a hole in the story as I was writing it, that I never managed to satisfactorily patch up. > Tell us if you have something else written to share. This is my first piece of long-form fiction, have submitted a couple of new pieces to competitions since, and aim to post those and more soon! | ||