Pretty good, but it's missing the punchiness of "we wrote ten articles, and here's what we've learned: every tip, every misstep, every verbal tic".

I hate how it's everywhere now. Even my coworkers speak like this.

The critique of my performance you are making is not an insult, not necessarily disagreement -really big juicy emdash- but a somber reference to the common punctuation style that many are understandably becoming frustrated with.

Edit: There are three ways to address this......