Yeah it doesn’t really make sense. Very wordy and doesn’t really clearly explain the types of accounts. Those should be the first thing you layout.

If you’re aim is kids you probably want to start with a story about something they can relate to and how the different types of accounts help. The reading level feels like it’s targeting college+ but not clearly.

A checking account is this. This is what is helpful for, this is its down side. Here’s a savings account here’s a high yield. Here’s an investment account etc.

Edit: love the idea though!

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