Seems to stretch an one analogy in too many different directions. I guess the point of losing control is the most true.

What parts felt too stretched? Or just as a composition would you have preferred I narrow it down? I thought it was fun that it goes a little overboard. To me it felt like doing so captured just how much these journeys can change over time.

I tried to focus on 3 main bits:

Early exploration, problems between people, and then how much is ultimately in or out of your control

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