The sentences do drone on, but they're fully coherent; this is above-average writing. It wouldn't likely meet publishing standards, but it's a lot better than you'd expect a randomly-chosen person to produce.

I'm sure an editor would go through and suggest tightening up some points, but I agree it's good enough as a first draft.

The problem is there are too types of writers who don't get the help of an editor, those who are too big and famous to accept one and those too poor to afford one.

I sort of feel the people who are saying it's bad aren't very able to separate their own preferences from determining quality

https://medium.com/luminasticity/to-speak-meaningfully-about...