Thanks for the feedback. The reason that I put up half the book and offered it for $1 to start was to make sure that people that didn't like it wouldn't buy it.

I struggled with this opening and it definitely could have been better.

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conartist6 6 days ago | parent [-]

Sorry, I'm a notoriously harsh critic. That probably comes from being homeschooled by two English major parents (a poet-professor and a journalist).

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loumf 6 days ago | parent [-]

No worries at all. I really do appreciate constructive feedback. I put every draft of the book out there that I could, and this is my best version of making the book I wanted to make that resonated with at least some people.

I totally get that it's not for everyone.

	▲	volkk 6 days ago \| parent [-]
		I think people are being extreme pedants at best, disingenuous at worst. I think your analogy is clear, and the people that can't connect because they don't understand swimming is in the minority.